Writing for love is a pas

Well, I thought it was deep. I thought it portrayed a sad picture that was fuzzy around the edges because I didn't completely know what was going on. More detail ...

Burning muscles scream in rage, bloody fingernails tear in pain. I'm slowly ripping my past away, every vain by fucking vain. Flesh is lying on the ground, My dull heart ...

Wow. This was great. No, extremely amazing. It was totally great. I just have a small nit-pick. Your ehh, phrasing. Everything falls into line except the way you put the ...

OK i added more...I think it's pretty decent now, don't you?

Ok, so I kind of lengthened it up...but I'm stuck. Im not really sure how to write lyrics, so i need a lot of help. =]

Wow. This is the most hardcore thing you've ever written. *GOLD STAR* Amazing. I could feel it pulsing around me, like it was playing in my ear. Best song EVER ...

Black as the darkest night, Frightened fools run in fright. While I laugh in the face of murder. Blood runs down my face. It will finally end this way. We've ...

good,bye By Kisba Did you run away? Like the wind, for the hills as they say... (I like the beginning, it's poetic and to the point.) 'Cause when you win, ...

OK so I changed it to where innocent little 12 year olds won't get so worked up. (By the way it was rated R) Ummm, the "f-bomb" was used so ...

This was sweet and definately to the point. I loved it =] Your first two lines were the most powerful...maybe you should make the last lines powerful too? They are ...

I'm addicted to your lies. They keep me living life. And when our last day comes, I can finally cry. I never gave up hope. I ignored the tears from ...

Thanks *grins sheepishly*

Can’t Take the Pain I liked you , I though you joined my friend crew . But you listened to your other friends , My heart bends! It hurts in ...

hmmm, expression.... I think I will keep it the same.

I like her username It's original